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So this is a fanart of a fan art. XD I used the Inspector Iroh AU :iconinspectoriroh: which is an amazing AU that is in a modern world with Iroh as a Homicide investgator along with Zuko for the Dai Li in Ba Sing Se. Katara's a doctor of sorts. (It's supposed to be Emergency Room Surgeon/Pathologist type deal.) Also I wrote a mini-fic that inspired this.... Hence the WIP and the word 'Chakras'.I don't know If I'll continue or edit first. Also instead of saying 'Jane Doe' Ya think they might say "Joo Dee"?
See if you can spot the canon reference.
And no, it's not really Zutara. It just seemed funny.
I actually figure that Zuko and Katara are maybe friends, in the trading barbs sort of way. Maybe she knows about his (AU only) crush on Suki. I'd bet she might give him a lot of crap about that

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Zuko awoke to a blaring light, and a feminine voice speaking in some garbled language he didn't understand.

He wasn't sure, but he might be dead.

"....Mild concussion, some stitches in your hand, a few minor contusions, and a whole mess of bruising. Not bad for a guy who was just on the receiving end of a pipe bomb. Of course, you always were a show off."

"It's not nice to speak ill of the dead." Zuko grumbled, closing his eyes.

"Sokka was kind enough to bring us in for treatment. It's not everyday we have a bomb go off at a murder scene." Iroh said.

"Murder Scene?"

"Some whack job buried a women ID'd as Ying alive, and the vic was found at the ground breaking ceremony for the new international trade building in the east district." Zuko answered.

"You mean the Jee and Yao building?"

"The very same." Iroh said nodding.

"We got called in to investigate, we take a look around. I find a card on the body's wrists all tied up, take out my equipment, remove it, and whadya know? Ying has a pipe bomb attached to her arm. Radio activated. Whoever killed her, stuck around, and tried to do me in in the process."

"You sure it was Ying? Cooking with Ying? That one?"

"The one and only."

"So what was on the card, Nephew?"

Zuko fished out a plastic baggie from his jacket pocket.

"This. Take a look."

On one side a there was a crudely drawn human being with a stitched smile and seven dots running up the body the bottom most one colored. On the other what looked like a child's scrawl.

"One of Seven. Are you Afraid?" Zuko said, leaning up on one arm.
Katara craned her neck to look at Iroh. "I don't get it. Does that mean there's going to be more?"

"Undoubtedly. I think we can make a safe bet that who ever this is, they're going to keep killing. And keep leaving this as their calling card." Iroh said passing the baggie to Katara.

"They're Chakras. This is the earth chakra that's colored in, see?" Katara pointed at the red dot. "How did you say the vic died?"

"It looked like she was buried alive."

"I believe we've just discovered Mr. Chakra's M.O." Iroh said sliding off the table and wincing as he landed on his now tender foot.

"Refresh my memory, what Chakra's next?"

"Water. Someone's going to drown." Katara looked pale for a moment. "Ying was a pretty powerful and influential earth bender."

Zuko jumped off the exam table suddenly feeling antsy to get started on the case, despite the pounding in the back of his skull.

"You're an influential and powerful water bender Katara. You ought to be careful." Zuko said, closing his eyes and steadying himself.

"My nephew's right. I think you should head home for the night. Lock your doors and set the alarm."

"I am perfectly capable of taking care of myself."

"We're quite aware of that Miss Katara, it is merely a suggestion to be more careful, until we can figure out what comes next."

"I'll be fine." She insisted, then turned. Zuko caught her by the wrists and smiled.

"You should go home, and keep your idiot brother with you."

"How does Sokka pertain to this?"

"If you stick him in a wig, maybe the killer will get him instead. It's just a precaution. You could always stay at my place instead."
"I don't think so."
" Not like that. I'm just saying, it's probably for the best. Think of it as me saving you from being the next victim."
Katara glared at Zuko.
"Kindly remove your hands from my wrists, or I will remove them for you.
With no anesthetic."

Zuko dropped his hands quickly and scowled. He had tried to be nice but that never seemed to work around Katara.

"And sit back down! In case you forgot, you have a concussion I have yet to have treated. You're going to make yourself sick." Katara adomished, pulling a stream of water up to the back of Zuko's head.

"I think you should warn your sister. She's definately more prominent than I am."

"You really do hate me, don't you?"

"Speak to Azula, Zuko."

"She's right Nephew. We might as well speak to her and find out if she has any information about Ying and any enemies she might have had."

"Sure, of course. And tomorrow I'm going to sell my soul to Koh. We'll see how that goes down."

"You know you love your sister Zuko." Iroh

Zuko sighed.

"Let's go. I don't like the inside of the GHI here. Besides, Azula's always on a tight schedule."...

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What, no comments yet? Let's hope that a visit from ~InspectorIroh will fix that.

I was kind of wondering who would be the first to inject Zutara into the franchise, and how, even if it's remotely. You have actually found a somewhat subtle way to do it, even though it's not really Zutara (going by your own words).

It's a nice setup, and the use of the chakra-based clues is actually pretty clever. The dialogue was quite snappy, even though I would've worded some parts differently.

The story seems to be consistent with the comic, except this story makes it seem like Katara and Zuko have met each other on several occasions, while Katara spends most of her time in the Water Tribe Federation (although I must admit, this was never explicitly stated in the comic or the discussion thread).

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Yeah....I ref'd the 'Zutara' moment, but I figured Zuko and Katara would be aquainted (spelling) with as often as Zuko and Iroh must get banged up on the job. (I didn't know about the non-meeting.) And As I said in the comments, if they did know each other, they'd most likely argue (ending with Katara yelling at Zuko for splitting his stitches, or running on a sprained ankle to catch the bad guy, etc.

If you'd like to suggest more specific dialogue changes, it would be most appreciated. :)

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Zutara: Because in the avatar world, pigs do fly.
:icontheartrix:
It's been a while since my last reply, I apologize for this.

I guess I was referring to the part where Zuko is suggesting for Katara to stay at his place. It seems as if Katara knows exactly what to say. You could've played with a small hesitation or a small stumble in her speech. What I'm trying to say is that the conversation seems too smooth.

Not being a full-time writer myself, I can't really add any other insightful criticism. I tend to compare myself to Gabe from Penny Arcade, good with the visual arts but lacking when it comes to the literary arts.

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i happen to love gabe.

and penny arcade.

^^

anyways, I think i know what you mean. When i get around to updating/editing i'll try a new approach. thanks.

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Zutara: Because in the avatar world, pigs do fly.

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